Ye Ji Park / 111053 / b4
Mr. Garrioch
English Composition
November 29 2012
Make
a rational argument for a position you do not support personally. For clarity,
please state your true opinion first and then argue the opposite position.
Consider an issue that has affected you personally.
TRUE OPINION: A criminal DNA database should not be produced.
Retaining
the DNA of unconvicted suspects to create a criminal DNA database is controversial
because there is high possibility that an individual’s private information may
be abused. Also, a DNA database degrades an individual by allowing the
government to view every citizen as a potential criminal.
However, there is no doubt that a database greatly
reduces the risk of wrongful conviction and the time of tracking down the
suspects. Although some people argue that DNA testing does not guarantee 100%
accuracy and thus should not be used as the basis of convictions, it is much
more reliable than the conventional investigation method. For example, compared
to conventional fingerprints investigation, in which fingerprints are easily
smeared or contaminated, DNA testing is applicable even with very small amounts
of genetic data, notwithstanding contamination from oil, water, or acid. Therefore,
producing a criminal DNA database contributes to a more precise and convenient
investigation. (998 characters)
Nice. No grammatical stuff to speak of, and very clear. Good structure. Not much to suggest here, other than perhaps a closing paragraph that ties things together. Seems like you spent a lot of time perfecting the words to be concise, which is the point of the exercise. My guess is that a lot of students dig their own grave on college applications by taking these "little" questions too lightly.
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